Wednesday, October 22, 2008

melville

Animal farm

why do the animals let Napolen take control. first is the animals let Napolen take over. Napolen takes over because the animals are not as smart as the pigs so the pigs take advantage of the animals. In animal farm the pigs make the seven commandmets and make animal farm a little bit better by getting more food but there first lie is "we need more food its like are medicen and when we eat more we get smarter and when were smarter we get more food for us on animals farm. Second is that the animals are forced likes slaves. Napolen forced the animals ten times harder then he has ever pushed them. In animal farm the pigs said to the animals about the windmill "this windmill was nock over by snowball < (napolen) we all no who nocked over this windmill it had to be snowball who else would nock over < (spualer). Third is that the animals finally relized that napolen was no good. most of the animals fought aginest napolen but the either ended up dead or starved to death. Napolen had this planned out all the way from the start he knew that the animals would bow down to him and once he got away with more food he pushed it till he got what he really wanted to be ruler. The conclusion is that napolen had made all of the animals slaves and he new that once he gained there trust he was leader but then some of the animals have rebelled agiaenst him and they either got starved to death or got killed by the dogs.

2 comments:

Constitution Melville said...

You have some good ideas here Ashley, and you made some improvements from your rough draft.

Your first sentence shouldn't be a question - it should answer the question! Your third yellow (the animals realize Napoleon is no good) does not connect to why the animals accepted Napoleons lies. A better yellow would have been that they accept the lies because they're afraid of the dogs. Also,your quotes need to relate more closely to your yellows.

~Paulette~ said...

1st sentence begins with a capital letter and when u r starting a new sentence.